Peer Review: Reflective Essay draft
Author’s name: Aqeel AlkhawajaReviewer’s name: Tommy Perez Orbich
Provide the followin information about your essay:!" #rite your thesis statement$main idea below %if it is still a work in &roress' say so() started my essay with this quote'
"Writing is an exploration. You start from nothing and learn as you go."(E. L. Doctorow). This uote contains the main idea of my re!ection which is exploring and learning new things e#ery time you start a new paper.
*" #rite out one or two questions about your draft you would like your reviewer to answer"+o you find a link between the quote ) &rovided and the &arara&hs ) made , #hat can ) add$edit to im&rove the essay ,
Read the writer’s entire draft once" As you reread the draft' res&ond to the followin:!"
#rite down the sentence or sentences that contain this reflection &a&er’s main idea %accordin to you(" +oes the author focus on an overarchin theme$meta&hor$quotesymbol$etc", -uest how the thesis statement$main idea could be strenthened' clarified' or otherwise im&roved" +oes the author state which .evidence/ will be e0amined in the rest of the essay, -uest how the author could im&rove this &art of the essay"
This is a great introduction and an awesome theme. I dont really see need for improvement as far as an introduction !ut !rea" up your introduction and the first module a!out resume writing into two paragraphs !ecause the first module is a supporting paragraph.
1heck to make sure the content of the &a&er su&&orts the thesis and that additional evidence or content is not needed to su&&ort it" )ndicate one &arara&h in which the writer’s evidence is stron' and state the reasons why you think so" Then find one &arara&h that needs more evidence" +rawin from your own e0&eriences or understandin of the ty&e of assinment the author isdiscussin' suest evidence that miht work to better illustrate or develo& the main idea or sub claims"
$ou have more than enough supporting paragraphs. $ou were clearly a!le to provide evidence for each module we completed and how it related to your theme of learning as you go along. The !est evidence in my opinion was your e%planation of the first module& resume writing. $ou were honest a!out !eing unsure a!out what to do !ut then learning and adapting from your classmates to complete your first resume. 'ore evidence could !e presented in the paragraph
Types of reflective writing assignments
Journal: requires you to write weekly entries throughout a semester. May require you to base your reflection on course content.
Learning diary: similar to a journal, but may require group participation. The diary then becomes a place for you to communicate in writing with other group members.
Log book: often used in disciplines based on experimental work, such as science. You note down or 'log' what you have done. A log gives you an accurate record of a process and helps you reflect on past actions and make better decisions for future actions.
Reflective note: often used in law. A reflective note encourages you to think about your personal reaction to a legal issue raised in a course.
Essay diary: can take the form of an annotated bibliography (where you examine sources of evidence you might include in your essay) and a critique (where you reflect on your own writing and research processes).
Peer review: usually involves students showing their work to their peers for feedback.
Self-assessment: requires you to to comment on your own work.
Some examples of reflective writing
Social Science fieldwork report (methods section)
The field notes were written by hand on lined paper. They consisted of jotted notes and mental triggers (personal notes that would remind me of specific things when it came to writing the notes up). I took some direct observational notes recording what I saw where this was relevant to the research questions and, as I was aiming to get a sense of the culture and working environment, I also made researcher inference notes   .
 I found the notetaking process itself helpful, as it ensured that I listened carefully and decoded information. Not all the information I recorded was relevant, but noting what I found informative contributed to my ability to form an overview on re-reading. However, the reliability of jotted notes alone can be questionable. For example, the notes were not a direct transcription of what the subjects said but consisted of pertinent or interesting information.
Rarely did I have time to transcribe a direct quotation, so relied on my own fairly rapid paraphrasing, which risks changing the meaning. Some technical information was difficult to note down accurately  . A tape recorder would have been a better, more accurate method. However, one student brought a tape recorder and was asked to switch it off by a participant who was uneasy about her comments being directly recorded. It seems that subjects feel differently about being recorded or photographed (as opposed to observers taking notes), so specific consent should be sought before using these technologies  .
1. Description/ explanation of method.
2. Includes discipline-specific language
3. Critical evaluation of method
4. Conclusion and recommendation based on the writer's experience
Engineering Design Report
Question: Discuss at least two things you learnt or discovered – for example about design, or working in groups or the physical world – through participating in the Impromptu Design activities.
Firstly, the most obvious thing that I discovered was the advantage of working as part of a group  . I learned that good teamwork is the key to success in design activities when time and resources are limited. As everyone had their own point of view, many different ideas could be produced and I found the energy of group participation made me feel more energetic about contributing something  .
Secondly I discovered that even the simplest things on earth could be turned into something amazing if we put enough creativity and effort into working on them  . With the Impromptu Design activities  we used some simple materials such as straws, string, and balloons, but were still able to create some 'cool stuff'  . I learned that every design has its weaknesses and strengths and working with a group can help discover what they are. We challenged each other's preconceptions about what would and would not work. We could also see the reality of the way changing a design actually affected its performance.
1. Addresses the assignment question
2. Reflects on direct experiences
3. Direct reference to the course activity
4. The style is relatively informal, yet still uses full sentences.
5. Relating what was learnt.
Learning Journal (weekly reflection)
Last week's lecture presented the idea that science is the most powerful form of evidence  . My position as a student studying both physics and law makes this an important issue for me  and one I was thinking about while watching the 'The New Inventors' television program last Tuesday  . The two 'inventors' (an odd name considering that, as Smith (2002) says, nobody thinks of things in a vacuum) were accompanied by their marketing people. The conversations were quite contrived, but also funny and enlightening. I realised that the marketing people used a certain form of evidence to persuade the viewers (us?) of the value of the inventions  . To them, this value was determined solely by whether something could be bought or sold—in other words, whether something was 'marketable'. In contrast, the inventors seemed quite shy and reluctant to use anything more than technical language, almost as if this was the only evidence required – as if no further explanation was needed.
This difference forced me to reflect on the aims of this course—how communication skills are not generic, but differ according to time and place. Like in the 'Research Methodology' textbook discussed in the first lecture, these communication skills are the result of a form of triangulation,  which I have made into the following diagram:
1. Description of topic encountered in the course
2. The author's voice is clear
3. Introduces 'everyday' life experience
4. The style is relatively informal, yet still uses full sentences
5. Makes an explicit link between 'everyday' life and the topic
Brookfield, S 1987, Developing critical thinkers: challenging adults to explore alternative ways of thinking and acting, Open University Press, Milton Keynes.
Mezirow, J 1990, Fostering critical reflection in adulthood: a guide to transformative and emancipatory learning, Jossey-Bass, San Francisco.
Schön, DA 1987, Educating the reflective practitioner, Jossey-Bass. San Francisco.
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